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Blog EntryWriter's_Block_Challenge#37_An Ending by MarnilleMay 14, '08 12:09 PM
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“An Ending…”

By Marnille

 

 

 

 “Bright sun shines

          Smiling at me

Green grass cuddles

          My bare feet…”

 

…But the poem could never end with a happy thought

 

As two people close to mine

         

          Said Goodbye

 

Leaving a tiny flower

         

          Called Dandelion

 

 

 

In trying again….

 

 

“Bright sun shines

          Smiling at me

Green grass cuddles

          My bare feet…”

 

….But the poem couldn’t go on with this pain in me

 

As two people whom I loved

 

           Left me in vain

         

Leaving this Dandelion

 

          As fragile as me

 

 

 

My mind kept trying…

 

 

“Bright sun shines

          Smiling at me

Green grass cuddles

          My bare feet…”

 

…But the poem would just end in one verse

 

As my mama and papa

         

          Flew like an angel

 

Leaving this Dandelion

 

          Soon will have feathers

 

And leave me as well

 

 

My heart shouted…

 

 

“Bright sun shines

          Smiling at me

Green grass cuddles

          My bare feet…

 

…With this Dandelion in my hand

 

I smiled and said, “I’m done!”


13 CommentsChronological   Reverse   Threaded
poetessgarden wrote on May 14, '08
"Green grass cuddles
My bare feet"
Love these lines, sparks the imagination...
ianelle9803 wrote on May 14, '08
It is the cause of trying to write a positive poem out of that positive picture...
but when a writer doesn't feel better, a warm poem could never be created...so I just made it as simple as that...
that is writing a poem according to my own mood while I was doing this poem.
sumaxmail wrote on May 14, '08
I love how this shows the striving to achieve JUST the right words to depict the mood you want to convey. Isn't it wonderful when it all comes together?
mysticmichael wrote on May 14, '08
"Green grass cuddles
My bare feet…”

That line is perfect. That's just how grass feels underfoot though I've never thought to word it that way.



ianelle9803 wrote on May 14, '08
Yes mysticmichael, grass feels like cuddling our barefeet like a baby.,,.
I really like to make this poem warm and happy but I've noticed the 2 persons in the picture who are like walking away from the one holding the dandelion, well it just fit my mood...;D

Thanks for the comments!
aendzie wrote on May 14, '08
lovely poem! I like it, ^^
gabkintanar wrote on May 15, '08, edited on May 15, '08
very beautiful! i read it over and over. such a lovely piece :)
bodomian wrote on May 17, '08
HOn u still dominated this place! wow!!! what a lovely kind of piece. u always have the guts on this challenge! keep up the good work! Luv u!
zeezeewriter wrote on May 18, '08
Terrific. I loved this continuation.. as so it should be.
harleymick wrote on May 19, '08
wow... I am in awe over your ability to pull so much from this scene.

Great piece!
skyerider wrote on May 20, '08
nicely written!
richardssassykitty wrote on May 21, '08
Sad but very well written!
ianelle9803 wrote on May 23, '08
Thanks for the wonderful comments!!!! Promise to make you all happy in the coming challenges!!!
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